SHOULD PREP. CLASS BE OBLİGATORY?
You have won the university exam and have come to the university.Do you think, what do you do then you?That is, you should do immediately first class or read preparatory class? Why?
The first reason, you have come to a different city. Furthermore, you don't know of any place in the new city. For example, you've gone through the first classs. Your lessons will be diddicult. In this case, both in new classes will be difficult to recognize both university. On the other hand, if you read our preparatory class, lectures will be more comfortable. Moreover, you'll get more time to explore. Besides, when the first class, you will not have complience problems.
The second reason, you can learn a foreign language.After garduating, for example, you can not find work in Turkey, you can go to the abroad. Furtjermore, you can win a bettery salary in abroad.
The third reason, in prep. class will be from each department students. Morever, you have each department's fr5iends.
Long story short, if you read preparatory class, you have many advantage. And my advice is, you must read preparation class
your introduction should be more general. ıt should flow from general to specific.
YanıtlaSilyou don't have thesis statement.
your topic sentences are not very clear.
the first reason is you can explore university and city.
the third and last reason is you can have many friends.
ın conclusion, ...
your content should be richer. you should write more in all paragraphs. just your 1st body paragraph is ok.
you should write more in introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion paragraphs.
NOT READ UNIVERSITY/ READ PREP CLASS!
IT'S "STUDY" AT UNIVERSITY/ STUDY AT PREP CLASS!
your introduction has questions,i like it but your introduction paragraph was very sharp.
YanıtlaSilyou wrote regular in your ideas .
Body paragraph is very short. you must develope it and you should give an example.
Neverthless,I understand your essays.
conclusion Paragraph is short like final sentence.